Clive creates a story to entertain the reader. He uses a character, Mrs Braithwaite, who is a witch. She is dangerous. He also describes the go-carts which he built. They are not very good. He divides the story up into paragraphs to make it easy to read. Each paragraph is quite short. He tells the story in order.
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Does pick up the word entertain from the question, but doesn’t answer it.
Notices the character of Mrs Braithwaite, but doesn’t go into details about how she is used to entertain.
Is very short, and has very few details in it. Although the answer tells us that the go-carts James built are not good, it doesn’t use a quotation to tell us exactly how.
Talks about paragraphs, but in a way that is generalised, and doesn’t link them to the question.
Jumbles all the points together rather than separating them out into different paragraphs.
Uses the writer’s first name to refer to him. Always use a writer’s surname, not their first name.